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I won't break by ~Gingerbread1814:iconGingerbread1814:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Fixed


My heart still beats
My blood still flows
My breathing continues
And I still grow

The sun still shines
The wind still gales
The waves still crash
And the clouds still hail

Time ticks on
The hours go by
Days turn to weeks
As memories die

Life goes on
Though you're not here
But I won't break
Because of you, my dear
©2008-2009 ~Gingerbread1814
:icongingerbread1814:

Author's Comments

Quick little poem I wrote to keep me determined. Not amazing, but it doesn't need to be to help.

"And I still grow" has more than one meaning.

Hope you don't mind it's simplicity.

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~Destiny-Star Jan 21, 2008, 4:05:46 PM
Simplicity is sometimes good. This is a very moving poem! Good language. Well done!

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!twilightchristian13 Jan 21, 2008, 4:06:10 PM
hm...its good.

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~LeaTelamon Jan 21, 2008, 4:06:43 PM
The first three stanzas are great because they are so direct if you understand what I mean, the last one becomes a bit cheesy when it becomes apparent it's a love poem more than a sort of introspectal one I expected.

I understand these kind of things might go on forever though, so take my comment with a grain of salt.

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~Gingerbread1814 Jan 21, 2008, 4:07:00 PM
Cheers :)

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"After all, what could be more of a temptation to a man than the daughter of the devil himself?"
- The Roots of Desire
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~Gingerbread1814 Jan 21, 2008, 4:07:17 PM
Thank you!! :D

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"After all, what could be more of a temptation to a man than the daughter of the devil himself?"
- The Roots of Desire
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~blazing-sunset Jan 21, 2008, 4:07:24 PM
i really like this, its vague enough for multiple interpretation which is awesome, to be able to write in a way that relates to everyone. =]

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"I was a child and she was a child,
In this kingdom by the sea;
But we loved with a love that was more than love"
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~Gingerbread1814 Jan 21, 2008, 4:10:42 PM
Thanks for your comment :) Unfortunately, momentarily stuck in "cheese", ha.

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"After all, what could be more of a temptation to a man than the daughter of the devil himself?"
- The Roots of Desire
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~Gingerbread1814 Jan 21, 2008, 4:11:09 PM
Thank you! I'm glad you like it!

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"After all, what could be more of a temptation to a man than the daughter of the devil himself?"
- The Roots of Desire
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~blazing-sunset Jan 21, 2008, 4:43:10 PM
;] keep it up

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"I was a child and she was a child,
In this kingdom by the sea;
But we loved with a love that was more than love"
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